Slow start. Then very entertaining and cute.
What I would have changed: After the boat left, he realized the Flamingo Dancers would come for him, so he got on a train out of town. He realized he loved Anne, and because the seasons changed, he knew Anne and the Shaw family would return to St. Charles for the season. He gets on anther train to St. Charles and runs into The Flamingo Dancers. The Flamingo Dancers wanted their money. They taught him the meaning of "Paying through the nose." Anne, seeing him in town, all bruised up and still caring about him, tries to help him. Then he would learn that Anne has money. She only took the job because she was on summer break from college and decided to stay to spite her rich parents. When she found out about her love needing the money, she seeks out her family whom she had become estranged. They had only sent her to school to find a husband. Since she found love, they help. He asks her about how she could forgive him for the french chick. She explains that after spending a year working for them, she saw how miserable Shaw made the family and how important it is to marry for love, and not money, she remembered him. When she learned that he faced The Flamingo Dancers for a glimmer of a chance to win her love back, she decided she could begin to forgive him. Then he can keep those last lines in his book.
PS, how is there a train to an island?
What I would have changed: After the boat left, he realized the Flamingo Dancers would come for him, so he got on a train out of town. He realized he loved Anne, and because the seasons changed, he knew Anne and the Shaw family would return to St. Charles for the season. He gets on anther train to St. Charles and runs into The Flamingo Dancers. The Flamingo Dancers wanted their money. They taught him the meaning of "Paying through the nose." Anne, seeing him in town, all bruised up and still caring about him, tries to help him. Then he would learn that Anne has money. She only took the job because she was on summer break from college and decided to stay to spite her rich parents. When she found out about her love needing the money, she seeks out her family whom she had become estranged. They had only sent her to school to find a husband. Since she found love, they help. He asks her about how she could forgive him for the french chick. She explains that after spending a year working for them, she saw how miserable Shaw made the family and how important it is to marry for love, and not money, she remembered him. When she learned that he faced The Flamingo Dancers for a glimmer of a chance to win her love back, she decided she could begin to forgive him. Then he can keep those last lines in his book.
PS, how is there a train to an island?